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In the present age,the parents and teachers who have the responsibility to teach children have sparked much debate.This essay will discuss both sides in this issue.
Some people tend to think that parents is the best guide of children`s life.As far as I am concerned,this view may be based on the consideration that parents will give more influence to children than school.It is reasonable due to the fact that children live with parents for a long time before going to school.Therefore educating children to know how to show there respect to elder people and obey the rules of society is widely be thought the responsibility of parents.
On the other side of the debate though,many individuals argue that maybe parents cannot give the correct effect to the children thus they consider that school should play an mainly role in the education for children,thereby avoiding the harmful effect.They claim that they have confident to educate the children grow up to good members of society.For instance school have good educational facilities,excellent teacher and perfect educational system.
On the basis of the above factors,my conclusion is that both of the children`s school day and family day are important to children.So,for teaching them to be good members,we should take more attention to them and give them the first-class education not only from school but from parents as well.
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